bee - zip dart up down
gentle landings carefully
gathering nectar
This week I used a photo from last week that I took purposefully for a haiku. As I gathered my list of words and started a draft I had trouble thinking of the last word in the second line. This syllable work makes me focus on words with more intention. Carefully wasn't on my original list so I skipped a line to show it was added after my initial ramblings. Then I wasn't sure what word I wanted to end this haiku with and did a Google search, adding nectar after carefully on my list. I like thinking about the process here and hope it benefits my students next year.
Thank you Heidi at my juicy little universe for hosting Poetry Friday this week.
Hi, Mandy. Zip and dart have such great energy in line one -- then the gentle, careful landing and gathering in lines two and three. It's a little portrait in haiku form.
ReplyDeleteI like how short and bee-like your words are in that first line.
ReplyDeleteSlowing down is the action you've shown so well, Mandy. I wish I'd seen this sooner. I had the granddaughters this afternoon into evening & we actually talked about how bees work and what they do, looked at pollen-laden bee legs. They would have loved your haiku, as I do!
ReplyDeleteGood reminder to mix in some gentleness with all of our zip and zoom!
ReplyDeleteI love the contrast from the energy and movement in the first line to the gentleness of the last. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI find that structured poetic forms really help me as a writer - my mind can easily bounce all over the place, but structure and form help me focus!
ReplyDeleteI like the rhythm in your haiku Mandy, stacatto at first, and then slowing down as they gather nectar!
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